Eight Sentences: Zeelia (1)

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Tears blurred everything, making the darkness doubly treacherous. Sweat almost cost her the sabre; her grip was growing weaker. Blood caked her hair, a soggy crust tugged each time she moved. Exhaustion was overtaking her faster than the scalehounds tracking her scent. Her hands shook too much to check on the gun. She forced herself to keep moving. It couldn't be too much farther, and if it was, then it would do her no good. It would all be over before it could really begin.


The Weekend Writing Warriors site sponsors a round of 8-sentence excerpts every weekend. This is my first one. I plan on making this a regular feature, if only to help build-up some more momentum with the writing. There is a Linky-list for everyone participating in the blog-hop this weekend. Check out some of the other writers!

Comments

  1. LindaJanuary 12, 2014 at 8:26 AM

    I really wonder in what kind of situation she is.

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    1. garrisonjamesJanuary 12, 2014 at 1:19 PM

      She's in trouble. We'll discover more as this goes along.

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  2. MarciaJanuary 12, 2014 at 10:33 AM

    Hi and welcome to WeWriWa :-) You've got a suspenseful and kind of creepy excerpt here--what's chasing her, where's she going, what happened to wear her down so much? Hope you continue with this next week!

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    1. garrisonjamesJanuary 12, 2014 at 1:19 PM

      Hello, and thanks! I intend to continue, just to find out some of those very things...

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  3. UnknownJanuary 12, 2014 at 10:42 AM

    Great description :)

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    1. garrisonjamesJanuary 12, 2014 at 1:21 PM

      Thanks. I'm looking forward to finding out more as things progress. With luck, I may have a second serial here...

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  4. UnknownJanuary 12, 2014 at 10:43 AM

    Great description.

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  5. UnknownJanuary 12, 2014 at 10:44 AM

    Great description. (sorry if this appears multiple times. I'm having trouble logging in and not sure if it's working. )

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    1. garrisonjamesJanuary 12, 2014 at 1:25 PM

      No problem--we moderate all the comments due to the spammers we've had drop by in the recent past. I may just turn that off on Saturdays, to make it easier for people.

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  6. Veronica ScottJanuary 12, 2014 at 12:07 PM

    Intense snippet, great details...will be interesting to learn more.

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    1. garrisonjamesJanuary 12, 2014 at 1:23 PM

      Thanks. This will certainly continue. Wow--with all this great encouragement I'm going to make this an every Saturday thing for sure now!

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  7. KateJanuary 12, 2014 at 3:04 PM

    Intense opening. Welcome to WeWriWa.

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    1. garrisonjamesJanuary 12, 2014 at 3:07 PM

      Thank you. We like spicy foods and intense fiction. Looking forward to reading more of everyone else's WeWriWa entries!

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